Time...
Its wasting away
with every second
of every day
Time...
Its fleeting by
with every blink
of your eye
What more is there to say
about something that withers away?
Yes, thats what they say
time is fleeting by
and wasting away
And I know its true
But this life is just so long
here, without you
Yea, so.... not sure if I'm liking this one or not. Not really feeling "inspired"
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i think it was inspired...
wow, haven't read anything of yours in a while...You had a new tone in this one in my opinion...I couldn't relate more with this poem...execellently crafted in my opinion...great write!
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thank you muchly!
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Very nice
I like the idea of time and the poem creates a sort of angst about it almost like it's asking time to wait but at the same time asking it to go.
It's good and the ending was a twist I didn't expect but it makes the angst factor double.
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ya... i think that one poem every year is 'uninspired' ... but i think you should post a poem everyday anways..
i like it... i like the fact that it was kind of a surprise ending... i thought you were going someplace else... which is cool.. cuz i like this ending better than the one i was thinkin you was gonna do... lol...
you know what this comment needs??? it needs to copy almost your whole poem into it... like you didnt know what you said... lol...
anyways.. i liked it..
write another one... i know you are holding out
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Beautiful job
What more is there to say
about something that withers away?
Yes, thats what they say
time is fleeting by
and wasting away
And I know its true
But this life is just so long
here, without you
u have done with this poem. its a great write u have done. keep da ink flowin. u have great talent n ure poetry is amazing. once again bravo write..
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