Oh the slow passion you do impose
Upon my cheek, my lips, my nose
No time to think, emotions brewing
No time to think, what am I doing?
I await each day your single thought
Patience one of many things you taught
No time to think, lies your spewing
No time to think, what am I doing?
Infatuation, anticipation for lustful touch
Oh great temptor you laugh as such
No time to think, my mind your screwing
No time to think, what am I doing?
Consciousness of your fallacy I gladly dismiss
When you grant the honour of a simple kiss
No time to think, for you im queuing
No time to think, what am I doing?
Author notes
ConjurerCaptainTam
A contest entry
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Comments
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My boyfriend's name is Damien.
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"I await each day your single thought
Patience one of many things you taught
No time to think, lies your spewing
No time to think, what am I doing?
Infatuation, anticipation for lustful touch
Oh great temptor you laugh as such
No time to think, my mind your screwing
No time to think, what am I doing?"
- Yes, i understand this perfectly.
I love it. Submit it to my contest por favor.
I have extended the deadline.
~Megan
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Infatuation, anticipation for lustful touch
no erotic at all
I'm only 14
disqualified
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wow
you can feel the emotoins running through your head i like the repeat(no time to think) you expressed it real good best of yours sofar no offence xxxluvlanaxxxx -
Tammy that is phat!
the flow goes like heavy breathing or pulsating and expresses the passion of it - yuck - stop it!
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Hmm. Nice flow. It's amazing!
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great flow, and lovely poem. this part sounds awesome "infatuation, anticipation" hehe, so fun to say
keep writing, and take care
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fun to feel aswell
thanks for your praise x
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Loved the simple, straightforward rhyme of this; unlike many poems there is no sign of forcing, and it performs every action needed by from rhyme.
Repetition of lines is always a sorta make-or-break for peoms that use it, here in this poem it works vey well
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this is really good.
it felt really natural, and easy to read this poem,
your words flowed very well.
good job! :]
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You have a great flow with this one. I found my eyes flowing from one line to the next with complete ease. I also liked the way you used your words.
Thanks for sharing.
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usually i dont really like rhyme, but the flow and rhythm of this was so well done.
i liked the repetition of 'no time to think, what am I doing' line
great poem
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I'm generally not a fan of rhyme as I think it tends to be forced, however, everything about this poem flowed naturally.
"Infatuation, anticipation for lustful touch
Oh great temptor you laugh as such"
I like =]
Well done, keep writing!
Shelly
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i liked the rhyme of this, it was really...natural, no evidence of forcing it, the last two lines really made this poem great for me
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I like it!
How we can so easily forgive everything for a kiss...
The repetition of the last line works well :-) -
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tell me about it
my naivety is shocking
fanx
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I loved it
very short and sweet love poem nice ryhme strait to screwing what am i doing that was very commical -
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oh my did i let that slip?
hehe
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LOL!
A very fine poem! You seem to have a very natural talent, my dear! What a fine short love poem! Great imagery and wording! Your rhymes are good as is the rhythm and flow. But, you really shod check your spelling! Very good work!
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could someone highlight my spelling faults?
i must be blind to them
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Excellent job in rhyming couplets, beautiful write, enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest.
Vito
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Thank you for your entry, Josie
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