we went to a restaurant. meat crawled up the walls. the waitress tied me to a chair and forcefed me massive, mutated hands with no names. my head spun into a swarm of impermeable noise. we went home, i slept.
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i have a headache
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A contest entry
- new slang by hilly.
700 points, ended November 8, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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a day in the life?
headaches seem to create a 'swarm of impermeable noise'..it's terrible, really. i think that..this poem resembles the kind of malaise a headache brings. very well articulated in this unique style of yours.
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thanks
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this is my favorite poem of yours
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Wow. This was very strange and yet brilliant. Love your style of writing.
Congrats on the bronze.
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thank you
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i really like this one, but you already know that. i'm trying to start commenting on all the entries.
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totally weird, but good nonetheless.
helen~
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this is cool.
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I agree with pumpykin. I like it's suggestive nature.
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This is really different from your other work. The sentences are short, and you don't go too far into detail about anything, just skipping to the next event or observation. I like both styles.
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thank you lisa
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Lol woww this is awesome :]
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thanks
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