apache
stretching bow
aims the arrow head
target sought
wolf
stalking braves
hungry eyes
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Septolet - Prompt - Native American Word Bank by Little Eagle.
700 points, ended November 22, 2008, 7 entries
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YOU CAN CREATE WONDERMENT FROM SO LITTLE, IT IS SUCH A SKILL, I AM HONOURED TO READ YOUR WORK,
WOLF STALKING BRAVE
HUNGRY EYES
WOW SUCH IMAGRY AND AMBIANCE
THEY SAY THE BEST THINGS COME IN SMALL PACKAGES AND THEY ARE RIGHT
THANKS FOR SHARING
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Thank you for your entry
Well done here. I can see the Apache on his hunt now. I would say though that wolves and the Native American had a special connection, I do not know that they would be stalking braves as much as guiding them.
The form was followed well, word and line count right on. Well developed imagery and good flow and structure.
I encourage you to keep writing and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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Great image to create in so few lines.
The paucity of words makes it almost like a silhouette of an image, but distinct nonetheless.
One suggestion I'd make.
Instead of arrow head, maybe arrow shaft.
Arrow head sounds like there's no arrow, just the arrowhead seeking the target.
Wonderful.
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Thank you scoff, for your lovely comments.
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I really like this. I can visualize the bow seeking it's target. (the arrow, rather) and see the wolf lurking nearby. Nice job
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Thank you Littleboots, for your lovely comments.
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