Fresh smell of wood burning
snap crackling of the log,
burns down into red fiery ambers
coals stirred sending sparks up.
Window panes with snowflakes design
Kids sit together with bowl of popcorn
Giggling as they watch their favorite show
Waiting for dad to return from plowing...
Author notes
Prompt: Winter 50 words
A contest entry
- 50 words: Winter by whiterabbit..
500 points, ended November 27, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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It's given me the scent of resin, which I love, so thank you for that. Warm poem for a winter night.
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Outstanding
I loved the way you described the fire in the first half of the poem and then added a few details in the second stanza to add to the warmth of the first stanza- i.e. the children laughing, watching tv and waiting for dad to arrive home. I liked the over all simplicity and the imagery in the first stanza. A brilliant poem.
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Wow! That's amazing for a mere fifty words! Your imagery is great, and I can literally feel what you've described! Yeah, some people may use imagery and you can get the image in your head, but when one writes in such a way whereas the reader can tangibly feel it . . . now *that's* what I call good poetry!
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