My soul spills forth in written word
so many paths for pen to tread.
This journey began, when I was eight
shaping the character of my life.
My muse so open to the obserd
manifest thoughts within my head.
Seldom wholesome words adorned my plate
but I still I ate them with my knife.
My mentors words to me detered
for my ears to them were dead.
Hunger for knowledge, unable to sate
all they gave to me was strife.
My joy in time more prefered
to a muse so full of dread.
From spiritual growth I now relate
soul was groom heart was wife.
My different directions, in life blurred
focused on a middle ground I was lead.
Looking for higher self, to elevate
soulfully heartfelt muse, with love was rife.
Author notes
Phyquain Form By -Arkbear-
MUST have 5 Quatrains -
No letter ( a ) in 1st L of each Q -
No letter ( b ) in 2nd L of each Q -
No letter ( c ) in 3rd L of each Q -
No letter ( d ) in 4th L of each Q -
ALL 1st L's must have same end Rhyme -
ALL 2nd L's must have same end Rhyme -
ALL 3rd L's must have same end Rhyme -
ALL 4th L's must have same end Rhyme -
Flow is a MUST!
Metaphores are a MUST!
Beautiful Poetic voice is a MUST!
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXIX - by Bear - by Arkbear.
600 points, ended November 7, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hello Bill
Form is perfect.....Flow seems a tad bit choppy, but on second read much better ~
Rhyme seems a weeee bit forced, but it works
Message is nice......cliche' in some areas but within this strict Form, you have done well ~
Thank you for entering this write of pondering thoughts.....good luck & God bless you!
Bear ~
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I think that you did a great job with this good luck to you in the contest best wishes always be well
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Looks good to me (of course, my eyes are blurred from editing mine....lol)...
I think you did well!
Nice job!
best wishes in the contest.
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Beautiful form and a different rhyming challenge. I like your content and commend you for such a fruitful effort. Exceedingly well done!
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so much time put it his and it shows,
with a soulful message and true to form
beautifukky done
God bless you my friend...
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NOthing I would want to attempt
You painted this so well, wonderful words couching spiritual feelings.
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You just always put it together in the best form. At least a total ten for that one. And, I bet this one gets engraved on every other poets mind as an explanation of what that elusive muse is.
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Thank you for such a wonderful comment. My Synapses were really firing writing this one. This was really a challange.
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