A maiden with skin like snow
Eyes that set her face aglow;
Emerald should their color be
This spell i chant to thee!
With hair that's both smooth and straight
And hips fit to procreate;
A touch that could calm a storm
This spell i chant, to form!
Bring this maiden unto me,
As i will so mote it be!
A contest entry
- Cast Me Under a Spell by StormGoddess.
700 points, ended November 10, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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One suggestion... Capitalize your title (the first letter of each word!)
just makes the whole theme look good
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I love making the first comment
Your poem is mesmerizing.
Very sensitive and full of luring romance.
This pretty much reflects the type of man you are.
I guess you tried to combine old and modern English which came out very smooth and it fits well.
It definitely added warmth and an edge to your write (am in love with shakespear, so anyone that would attempt his style I would literally fall in love with. Lol)
I loved how simple your poem is and your vivid description of your fair maiden.
Beautiful =)
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