I'd seen you years before,
And I'd only seen you as a friend;
Another guy who wanted to hang out,
Someone to have fun with.
We were completely inseparable,
And we loved it!
We played games
And got our exercise jumping on the tramp.
Our sides split with laughter each day,
And our faces lit up with smiles.
We jumped around and around,
Giggling and relishing in the moments.
Then I switched schools.
I hardly even thought of you,
And I found a new best friend.
I regret that...
Then you arrived at the Middle School.
I was in seventh grade,
And you were in sixth.
I didn't take a lot of notice in you.
But then I decided to wave and say hi.
More like yell it.
At first I guess I scared you!
But then, you finally came around.
You started waving at me,
And I kept thinking:
"Holy Cow!!!!
He actually likes me!"
Everyday, my stomach did flips and twirls
And my heart accelerated to the speed of a bullet.
I loved seeing you each morning...
And then you smiled.
My knees went weak
And I almost fell to the ground.
I waved more frantically
And smiled more enthusiastically.
Now I knew it was true.
Now I had absolutely no doubt about it.
But it was still hard to believe
That you could like me, too.
On Valentine's Day you waited;
Under the stairs you stood,
And when I walked out, I lost my breath,
And then you smiled.
My knees went weak
And I almost fell to the ground.
I couldn't seem to move my feet,
And I couldn't see anything but you.
Now I knew it was true.
Now I had absolutely no doubt about it.
But it was still hard to believe
That you could like me, too.
The months flew by
And in November we were still smiling.
You gave me a note that said I love you,
And then you smiled.
My knees went weak
And I almost fell to the ground.
I couldn't seem to move my feet,
And I couldn't see anything but you.
Now I knew it was true.
Now I had absolutely no doubt about it.
But it was still hard to believe
That you could love me, too.
A week later I was happy as ever,
And then you came up to me.
You told me it was over,
And you didn't smile.
My knees went weak,
And I almost fell to the ground.
I couldn't seem to breaththe air,
And I couldn't see anything but my tears.
I had believed it was true,
And I thought there was absoultely no doubt.
Now it was extremely hard to believe,
That you had loved me, too.
Author notes
So this is really kinda what it felt like and I truly hope I described it well enough for you all! 
Forever Yours
I Tried So Many Times To Turn Away
Somebody, Somewhere, Sometimes...
There Was That Kiss
Okay - these are just reminders to myself to write them later because I love them! 
A contest entry
- Seven Sensational Options!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
650 points, ended November 19, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How do you like it? Let me know if there's anything to fix!
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I always find that relationships in which you are friends first and therefore get to know the person really well, are better and this shows that... It's so sweet.
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This is such a bittersweet poem - I really love the expression of feeling in this piece - you have done that extremely well I wish you the best of luck in the contest with this very personal pice
Keep writing
Polly
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This poem has had a strong affect on me, it holds an incredible amount of feeling...if this has happened for real to you, then I'm so sorry...however, you seem to look back quite fondly, albeit with a sad heart, it is experiences like this that build maturity, and you will most definitely have room in your heart for anothers loving smile...engaging and lyrical, with a heartbreaking touch...I do feel the poem could be more enhanced though with some of the capitols reduced, to fit in with the punctuation
~Lilac
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yes... it really did happen. Unfortunately it was two years ago and I'm still hurting over it. But I actually still love this guy with all my heart and I can't go a day without thinking of him and it actually kills me to even think of letting him go. I can't live without seeing him at least once a week - I found that out when I left to go to Germany for a month. I cried nearly every night.
But yes it did happen, and I still love him. And as for the punctuation and capital letters, I do that with all my poems because I'm obsessive compulsive about some things and this is just one of them - I think it looks ridiculously weird with one capitol letter and then the rest aren't because you're finishing the sentence. lol I have no idea why, but that's how it is with that. anyway, thank you for your kind thoughts on my poem. I really appreciate them.
~Koko~
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Such a sad piece but love doesn't always end this way that's for sure. well written. Best to you in the contest
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I think love is sweeter when it starts with childhood friendship. I thought it was like a song with the repeating lines. Best of luck to you in your future writes.
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Outstanding
We never forget our first love or how it all went wrong. I liked how you used repetition of key phrases to strengthen the poem with all the irony of the last couple of stanzas and how you described how you felt as the romance progressed. A sad but touching poem.
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Love is a very frail thing, fortunately the world is filled with smiles, there will be more for you at least you turned this smile into a very nice poem which I enjoyed, hope it heals.
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Hood-Winked!
Good write on a childhood crush! This has a good flow, you write this almost like lyric! I do see a need for some grammatical edits & some tightening up & I'll send my suggestions later. I like the way you express your emotions here & I almost feel as if I'm standing by you experiencing this myself which is a good quality for a writer to have! 
All the best in the Contest!
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Like it very much. No matter how old we are we still like it when he smiles at us. Years go by and that smiles remains indelible in our minds. Smiles give us that extra tingle and reaffirms what he feels. Sorry it didn't work out for you. Years from now you will remember that smile. Believe me there will be many many more to remember until the right "smile" comes and sweeps you off your feet. I enjoyed your write.
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