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An Inkling of Wisdom

Gently spread the skirt of life,
‘cross the cognitive lap of

your mind.


Blanket the weight of your

daily cares and tuck them

away in bed.

Brush curls of conceit behind
your ear and listen to
creatures of heart.

Open your eyes to the voice
of enchantment and converse
with created illusions.

It’s time to recline ‘neath the
tree of perception, as you drift
and bend it at will.

You just might find, in the

realm of conception that

reality never existed.

 

 

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  • Tirrell
    February 7

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    I love the imagery of this as well, and it is the last few lines that gives a punch. This is a wonderful poem! Love it.


  • Ithica silver member
    January 17

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    I like that you are writing more free verse! And you are just a proficient at this as you are with rhyme. Yet I find myself wondering what the result would have been if you had set this theme to form though this is quite lovely!!! Congrats. on the Gold!


  • Swan song gold member
    December 31, 2008
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    excellent write


  • Tirrell
    December 28, 2008
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    roflmao.... The notes (I assume Jeff had that stipulated in the rules) made me laugh. Though I was deeply carried by the imagery. It is quite beautiful.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    This is well done - and by your author notes, I am assuming you have stepped away from your comfort zone -

    you should do it more. :


  • Ellis gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    This poem makes me cry
    I don't want to die
    I say no
    I won't go
    Imagination I flat out deny!

    Tiki Cat
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    "Too Good For Humans"


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 22, 2008

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    He might of forced you to write this but...
    glad he did, coz look what it produced
    Brilliant write and well deserving of the gold


  • Hetha gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    I remember having such a discussion once, it last several countless hours with a friend over turkish coffee and biscotti, at a local bistro. Somehow we ended up talking about the subject of whether or not reality exists up under a large japanese autumn maple tree, hands folded and propped beneath our heads.

    I had to giggle at your author's notes. Yes, it can be difficult writing outside the comfort zone, you tackled this with fresh perspective, and did quite well with it.


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    December 9, 2008

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    The basted no rhymer should be forced to write Prose lol Well you had me in the first line then I realized it was a metaphor no skirt movement action in reality lol but after I had a sad the read wasn't that bad. What non rhyming poets don't understand is only a rhymer can write a non rhyming piece and give it a rhythm make it flow and not ramble out of control into Prose and as the dictionary says:
    1. the ordinary form of spoken or written language, without metrical structure, as distinguished from poetry or verse.
    2. matter-of-fact, commonplace, or dull expression, quality, discourse, etc.
    basically Boring unless in the tender hands of a rhymer
    Cyber Artist


  • Mariana gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    WOW!

    'It’s time to recline ‘neath the
    tree of perception, as you drift
    and bend it at will.'

    The imagery here is amazing. I am so glad you were 'forced' to write this! *grin*

     

    What is reality...such things to ponder! Congratulations on the well deserved gold!

    Mariana*rose*


  • MargaretG
    December 4, 2008

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    So much here

    I like the mixing of senses in these metaphors, as in
    "Open your eyes to the voice". There is a playful use of words and images that is very appealing, and you are right, the same old way of looking has not done much good. congratulations for gold!


  • Swan song gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    And look there you won gold. Your voice rhythmns flow through even into free verse! Simplpy stunning. This poem is the kind one would read and then read again dear!


  • mysticstorm gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Well girl, now you can say you are a queen of free verse as well...truly amazing as always...lovely metaphor and imagery with wonderful flow...congrat's on the Gold!
    Best,
    mystic


  • poeticweaver gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Congrates On The Gold!

    You so earned it sweet soul, and I thank you for sharing with us here your images and dreams that take us on a journey through your eyes. Lots of love, and thanks for all your encouraging ways while reading me teach.


    Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • Desire gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Wowzers~

    Okies we will blame cricketjeff for making You write Free Verse
    Oh My Word this gave my Mind much to inhale in a good way- I feel like I learned something and heck I was half awake- but fully alert now
    Tis all Your fault~
    I love the second stanza~

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!!
    Throws confetti
    Woot Woot~
    Well Deserved
    Keep that quill dancing Beautiful~
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~



  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    WOW!!

    Yeah, It feels like a world I've been visiting quite a bit! especially recently, and yeah..never know what you may discover huh? excellent write my friend!


  • Tirrell
    November 16, 2008
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    That final thought seems to resonate, I love this for it flows off the tongue so smoothly, and is quite a gentle read, packed with imagery and the last line really sticks in the readers mind. I belive your pen to be blessed. Wonderful write!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    November 15, 2008
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    <-proud

    That's MY sister got that gold!


    • Amera gold member
      November 15, 2008
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      I really love you! "proud" that even beats "not bad"


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    I cannot tell you how thrilled I am that Jeff forced you to do this! lol My God, girl, now you have conquered FV and with such style...I love this piece. I think the short stanzas do extremely well, and even though it is FV, there is a nice smooth rhythm that enhances your words. I am proud of you and your gold. Love, Lane


    • Amera gold member
      November 12, 2008
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      Oh Lane!
      You are the only person that I wanted to read this poem. I thought about you when I wrote it and wanted so much to do a good job. Thank you so much for reading it. I know I set my standards high as I try to write free verse as well as you. I think you already know that I think you are the best free verse writer of all time, not just here on AP. Thank you, thank you, thank you.
      Love,
      Your lil’ Sis


  • maa gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    great job here ...
    I like the rich imagery and metaphoric voice here ... the lack of rhyme gives it a gentle, calm note ... as for the content of your message, indeed, the mind does a lot of manipulation, and then takes what it experienced as "real" ... yet when we just sit down, close our eyes and let the mind together with its content dissolve in the space of presence, what is left can be called "reality" ... that is what we really, really are ...

    much love,
    maa


  • thepoetssoul
    November 9, 2008

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    It does have some wonderful images.
    The third stanza is my favorite.
    Congradulations on the Gold.

    Tony


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    You claim I had some part in making you write this, if so I can be pleased at my service to poetry, it is superb and well worthy of the gold, you are a poet.


  • sideways hourglass
    November 7, 2008

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    Wow, this is absolutely amazing. I am like, so astonished. This is probably the best poem I've read in a long time.
    I'm so jealous of it. I want to copy it onto a photo and sell it on ebay. But then again it is so original that i would get caught for plagiarism of course.
    I am guessing you usually rhyme. You did a great job with the free verse though.
    It's amazing how you barely showed, and just told; and yet it is still awesome. You used simple metaphors that make this a delightful breath of fresh air. I wish I could write just like this, just absolutely breathtaking.


    • Amera gold member
      November 8, 2008

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      This is one of the nicest comments I have ever received. Thank you so much. I must come and dance on your poetry.

      Love,
      Amera♥


  • Never Fall in Love
    November 4, 2008

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    In all of the free verses, you've ever written - even the ones I haven't read...

    I think this is your very best.

    ..and I'm loving the improvement

    ♥


  • Debbie Hansman
    November 4, 2008

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    What a Wonderful write...I enjoyed reading this.

    "Open your eyes to the voice
    of enchantment and converse
    with created illusions"

    And the way it ends is perfect.

    Thank you for entering & Good luck!

    debbie


  • Lexie - gold member
    November 3, 2008
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    And.........

    As usual you have done an outstanding job!!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    Forced indeed...at quill point I suppose! LOL! Just kidding.

    A most pensive write Amera, one to be proud of for sure.


    “Your vision will become clear only when you look into your heart. Who looks outside, dreams. Who looks inside, awakens.”


    Carl Jung-


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    Whatever Jeff said, I for one am very glad he did. This is an amazing piece of free verse and the rhythm you have used is quite spell binding as is the content.

    This was a joy to read and all the best in the contest.

    Love
    Sue


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 3, 2008

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    Go cricketjeff!!

    Im glad he bent your arm, Amera. This is as good as freeverse can get. It also packs a powerful punch.
    Joe


  • no longer a member
    November 2, 2008

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    Good attempt at free verse. I feel the subtle rhythm in here which makes it a bit better than good. Interesting subject matter. ~Bramble


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 2, 2008
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    Well versed freely !!!

    ...and reality is only how we perceive it to be.


  • penman gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    Excellent

    Such great images you have created with such sensuous emotions. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    Exellent Amera! I'm insecure about free verse too!
    You did this amazingly well! I love this line,
    "Brush curls of conceit behind
    your ear and listen to
    creatures of heart."
    And...the ending is a kicker!



  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    Makes me look at my realities and question them!

    Fantastic freeverse sis! You should do more


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 2, 2008
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    wow

    this is simply amazing, really loved the imagery, and the last line is POW! YEAH, LIKE A KNOCK UPSIDE MY HEAD!

    • Amera gold member
      November 2, 2008
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      Oh thank you, I'm so insecure about my free verse.


  • The Gambler
    November 2, 2008

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    Amazing! Each stanza brings me deeper into the metaphor. I don’t think I have ever read a poem like this before. You really should give us more of your free verse.

    P.


  • melphleg gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    They rhyme king forced you to write free verse? What gives?
    I thought you said you suck at free verse. This was good! Good metaphors and flow throughout. It is a good piece of poetry. I think you underestimate yourself.


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    Your were forced to write this? Well, one could never tell. This is done so flawlessly, it's almost like unrolling a scroll of ancient wisdom and finding a truth which was laid away to wait for those who drank of the fountain of philosophy.

    Brush curls of conceit behind your ear and listen to creatures of heart.

    `Magnificent Amera, you shine!


  • Faeryn
    November 2, 2008

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    I like it!! It's very good, Amera. The last stanza is amazing. I'm happy you are writing free verse. Please write it more often.
    and love,
    Tay


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 2, 2008
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    I don't know that I forced it!!!
    Lovely to see you pushing yourself and producing poetry well worth reading
    It's great stuff
    The final stanza is a real kicker

    • Amera gold member
      November 2, 2008
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      You embarrassed me into doing it.

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