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Mistaken

And I thought you were the one...
The one who would never deceive me...
Me? Who was I trying to fool?
Fool myself by trusting you...
You, who always had a good lie...
'Lie for a good cause' you said...
Said that to protect me...
Protect me from the world's cruelty...
Cruelty that was only yours to start with...
With that smug smile ...
Smile that almost killed my spirit...
Spirit already killed by you...
You, the one I'd die for...
For your smile, your kiss, your love...
Love that will never be mine...
Mine is only the pain...
Pain that you caused...
Caused by your ignorance...
Ignorance and a strange sense of humour...
Humour that I never understood...
Understood only the mockery...
Mockery that is your main flaw...
Flaw that I've tried to overlook...
Overlook with all my human powers...
Powers that you've taken...
Taken when you left...
Left me all alone in this world...
World that is so empty without your

Good lies,
Your cruelty,
Your smug smile,
Your kiss,
Your love,
Your ignorance,
Your strange sense of humour,
Your mockery,
Your flaws ......

Pain is the best Muse, isn't it ?

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  • Beauty Of Silence
    November 19, 2008
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    wow wow wow

    this is sooo deep. your emotions were so hard hitting. your words were full of raw pain. and the endind was amazing (not the sad faces, hahas, i meant the last stanza) but the sad faces work too anyhoo, i think this poem has great potential, you have great potential. keep penning, and keep going strong


  • SilentVoice
    November 3, 2008

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    that was really good.
    really heartfelt. thank you for that. it was really good.
    i like how you made the first word be the same as the last one on the other line. that was really good.
    thanks for sharing.hoping to hear more.


  • SeptemberFaith
    November 2, 2008

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    Hello UnknownPain,

    I like how you ended one line and started the next with the same word. That brings a very unique quality to your poem.

    My only suggestion would be to ditch the "....". That usually signifies a trailing thought and I feel like it takes away from the quality and readability of your poem.

    I think you did a good job expressing your feelings. Writing is such a healthy way to control the pain.

    Bravo Poet,
    Criss
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  • Shimano
    November 2, 2008

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    Pain -Growth

    Catchy Title..got me reading.

    From pain and been weak to love,one grows stronger and wiser,mind,body and soul..
    We all have to in some space in time be face to face iwth pain and the by products tears,anger,frustration,and low confidence...But soon than later the sun rises and awakes your being

    this the beauty of pain....Growth

    The mood I am in now this poem touches me because someone that I cared for Lied to me and I am now nurse to my own wounds..


    Thank you for sharing foor for my thinking mind