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I don’t elect to just waltz
into your ovary office.
I’ve yielded weaponry
yet donned armor,
shields, guards
galloping
like a spurred sperm
toward you
castle sketched,
you draw the bridge,
once again
white knight and steed
left to flail
in the question mote.
I know,
my
mail is not your
medieval model or hue
but the worn
white,
I polish daily.
My intentions -
not to populate
the planet
but
to
fertilize your future…
m’lady.
~
In a list
A contest entry
- show me brilliance here... x by Lavender Butterfly.
550 points, ended November 3, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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That was so pretty with little hints of what was to come.
Nice write.
Haha, I really liked it.
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Thank you for taking the time to stop by, read, and comment.
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"but the worn
white,
I polish daily. "
I like that.
~Pamela
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I see you've found one of my older ones. Thank you Pam for taking the time to wander by...
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It is a pleasure.
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Paul, I think this was better than bronze, and your intentions are stated in such a knightly fashion...alhough I could swear you look like a cowboy in that hat. Ahem, yes, a knight of the American west.
The metaphors are fabulous and left me smiling ear to ear...behind a fan, of course!
........ Really well done! ~ Karen
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Thank you for reading and commenting on this Karen. My pen chuckled the way through it.
Paul
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this is wonderful from title to last line...I love how you didn't stray with the metaphor & stayed consistent throughout - very sensual, Paul, congrats!
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Thank you Tara. This was one of my more enjoyable writes where one line seemed to lead to the next. Glad you enjoyed it.
Paul
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This is a lot of fun... as long as the lance stays sheathed.
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AAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaa HAHAHAHAHAHA! You are a funny one Marcy! *rim shot*
Either the lance could be sheathed or the knight could be riding a Trojan horse.
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Confused say
He who shoots
scores
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*curtsey* Why Sire, you may have just revived the sleeping lust in my loins.
Love,
Amera♥
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LOL - No really, I laughed out loud here. You are such a funny girl!
Thanks Amera of the Relm.
Paul
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m'lady, indeed. I loved your metaphor. lol.
You make me smile.
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Thank you K. You women often leave us swimming in the 'question mote' thinking what just happened?? lol
Paul
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Oh i love this. What an excellent metaphor and so subtely sensual. I'm sure she won't mind to be populated like this! Really great poetry and with a delightful classical feel about it!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you N. This one grew like a seed as I was eating breakfast. LOL Sometimes I start with just a nifty phrase and it propagates.
Paul
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