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Ego Sum Vir

 

 

 

 

Everyday

I look at my naked form

 

in a mirror

and write on rough surface

with delicate mind’s eye

 

I reckon

this body, a literary work

in progress

 

this physique

reworked

a thousand times

 

is ever changing

like poetic syntax

evolving

 

as I scan

diction and

multisyllabic content

 

with meter

and sheer will continues

to edit

 

flesh, along with dreams

sincerely

 

hoping

to transcend time.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: The Beauty of Being Unfinished.

The title is Latin, and translates as, "I am man."

Side note: if you have not already discovered it, read the first line of every stanza.

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  • Heart Sutra
    November 29, 2008

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    I like the flow of this piece. It is one of the few poems in the contest that just had a natural flow to it. The title is good too.

  • Rowan gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    I liked how it showed both sides as well, the critical and the more vulnerable side. Excellent take on the prompt.


  • just rob gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    I sing mans body poetic

    I'm not suprised that this contest has provoked such fine work. As a man of some sum of years, I couldn't but read this with a sense of brotherhood, a universal hymn of the thinking male.

    Well done! I'm glad I don't have to judge these.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    November 2, 2008
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    I reckon

    this body, a literary work

    in progress


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    Shows the two sides of the man here.. the rough/tough and the vulnerable...

    This says a lot MJ, about the ever evolving we go through in life... holds some questioning to me about our mark we leave, and also the fears we also have of being unfulfilled, along with the wish for more time to fulfill them.

    I think you leave more of a mark than you even realise.

    A deep write that touched the heart of this reader!



  • Nicolette gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    Cleverly written poetry, Michael. I simply love the title and the way you've made this your very own. The voice here is personal but it is such that the reader can identify and find himself or herself in this process of creating and re-creating too. Wonderful write!

    ~ Nicolette


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      November 2, 2008
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      *sigh* Thanks Nicky, your words are good for a man's slipping ego.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    hmmm, this is really good, i enjoyed it, i dont know if i can do anything better or close to as well.lol
    good luck and take care
    Stephanie ♥

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