Piece by piece
ourselves disappear
until fully unlaced
from our pasts
and who we used to be
weaving strings of laughter and tears
intricate patterns of love and life
a single new being
is knitted together
Author notes
36 words total if I counted them correctly. I just wrote this while I was crocheting. So it just kind of flowed out from me. My first real happy poem that I've ever put up here. I like it.
A contest entry
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please. i need spelling errors pointed out. please.
Comments
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I really like this - ties in nicely with crocheting, life, the cosmos.....
I didn't see any spelling errors....
Well done!
best wishes in your contest.
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really happy and and without ryhming it flows really well
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Me likey too!
As good as any Theory I've ever seen. I'm very much into 'Science' but so much is based on speculative 'theory' that it can get very discouraging! I needed to see something cheerful this morn & this was it! Funny you wrote this while working with strings! Trust you'll do well in the Contest!
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I'm glad that you liked my poem and that it made you smile. I have a heavy connection to why I wrote it, and so it means a lot to me that you liked it. Thank you very much!
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This is incredible...
You wouldn't be able to tell that this was your first happy poem. Excellent job/take on the prompt!
Thanks for entering and good luck!!
♣ Tegan
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