The empty shadow of the night
A rush of air from overhead
The icy blast of mortal fright
A scent that speaks of ancient dead
A rush of air from overhead
As off she flies to seek her prey
A scent that speaks of ancient dead
Beneath her spreads a cold decay
As off she flies to seek her prey
Her shadow sweeps away desire
Beneath her spreads a cold decay
Although she breathes infernal fire
Her shadow sweeps away desire
To see her face is near to death
Although she breathes infernal fire
Her touch is sure to freeze your breath
To see her face is near to death
She has no fear of man or beast
Her touch is sure to freeze your breath
Each night she seeks a different feast
She has no fear of man or beast
There are so few who stand her rage
Each night she seeks a different feast
She's known the taste of every age
There are so few who stand her rage
Some eagles and the boldest men
She's known the taste of every age
Tonight she seeks a citizen
Some eagles and the boldest men
The few who'll face this fiercest foe
Tonight she seeks a citizen
Who wanders in the land below
The few who'll face this fiercest foe
The noble figure of a man
Who wanders in the land below
With power to end her mortal span
The noble figure of a man
Stand firm before her mighty blast
With power to end her mortal span
She senses that her time has past
Stand firm before her mighty blast
A lance locates a missing scale
She senses that her time has past
She breathes her last ear-piercing wail
A lance locates a missing scale
The icy blast of mortal fright
She breathes her last ear-piercing wail
The empty shadow of the night
Author notes
Normally my dragons are friendly souls, one of my best friends is in fact a dragon and he will be most upset at me writing this piece. I blame an errant muse.
The pantoum (originally pantun) is an ancient form of poetry from the Malay peninsular where pantoums are still written, in eight syllable tetrameter and rhymed abba throughout the poem, each stanza has a related but developed theme. Brought to France in the 19th Century with an a1b1a2b2 b1c1b2c2 ... z1a2z2a1 scheme.
Over time the syllable counts have varied and a few poets have abandoned rhyme.
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A contest entry
- Obscure Forms 01: The Pantoum (options -- points will go up) by intoothandclaw.
550 points, ended January 5, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love the Pantoum form and you have been wildly successful with this one! Excellent, superp! I absolutely loved it!!
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By which I mean to say, amazing job! Thanks so much for your entry!
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Wow. I didn't expect anyone to be able to pull off a really good old-school-style pantoum... but you did! And a dragon poem, too! *dies of happy*
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I have no idea how you manage to accomplish such a piece following the pattern laid down and still make the reading of it a real pleasure.
Excellent I love it
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Love it! I love fantasy and dragons and magic. I love the pantoum and especially one well done like this one. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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Well done here, indeed not what I expected as you read itit to me I was a little beside myself but as I read for myself and see the end result, Its AMAZING.
Great job hon and best of luck to you in the contest.
Love you
Passions
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