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Unspoken Love

His icy blue eyes pierced my lonely heart
Turning away, feeling quite uneasy,
Not wanting to evoke love then depart,
thoughts crazy with romantic ecstasy

Wanting to look again and catch his eyes,
raising my head to see his smiling face.
My pulse was racing, began to devise
both had loves, never meant to be replace.

Could loneliness be overcome by him?
Would he reactivate the love once felt?
If the soul is craving, the heart is grim
inside I prayed fervently as I knelt.

Will I feel the love like a young maiden?
Experience the joy felt so seldom…

Author notes

A Shakespearean (English) sonnet has three quatrains and a couplet, and rhymes abab cdcd efef gg.


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  • Mercury Rising
    May 26

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    A wonderful English sonnet in the romantic tradition. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.

  • piccola silver member
    November 30, 2008
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    nice sonnet. thank you for entering. I like the colors in the background. I hate roses though ... no offense to the sonnet though.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    The meter intrigued me, but I like it
    The message is unusual and rather lovely, an excellent sonnet and congratulations on the gold.


  • Titus gold member
    November 22, 2008
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    The first thing with judging sonnet composition is a strange , 'does it sound right?", ignoring the fact that, 'icy' and having 'his', beforehand, I feel, you have to give it to the reader in that first line, and a simple, 'hypnotic', would transform it in a way no other would. and to take the reader on this travel towards that which is unspoken for. For that respect, you spoke it well.


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    November 17, 2008

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    very well written piece and you definately got your message across. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
    ED.


  • januaryrain gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    Wonderful write,

    Could loneliness be overcome by him?
    Would he reactivate the love once felt?
    For years my heart has carried so much grim
    inside I prayed fervently as I knelt.

    I hope he does.


  • docbill gold member
    November 1, 2008
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    Well put together and it gets the message across. Good work!

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