Really don't want to close my eyes,
because there are too many why's
popping up, after moments dark,
on which I have no sane remark.
I see some words play in my head,
that I not spoke, but should have said,
but then, maybe, it was too late
so I surrendered to my fate.
I see a pile of work, not done
and wonder where the time has gone,
when innocence was all I knew,
while strolling through wet morning's dew.
I see a life of truth and lies,
and lemonade and cherry pies.
Welcome kisses and sad goodbeyes,
it is all there, behind closed eyes.
Despite the fact that it is dark,
I always see this little spark,
which makes me grow in my believe,
that what I sow, I shall retrieve.
Author notes
Prompt: close your eyes and write a poem about the first thing that you see.
In a list
A contest entry
- Close your eyes and tell me what you see by Meroza.
1100 points, ended November 8, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Delightful -- Very Nice
Realistic, with a positive note of encouragement at the end.
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i feel you didn't let yourself drift away, you need to relax. Don't worry about unsaid words or undone chores, there is always a tomorrow. Even tho, this poem is good and the rhyme makes it catchy. God work.
Best of luck
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Don't worry about me Meroza, I'm a happy girl, but still, when closing your eyes, there are always things that will pop up in your mind.
Beautiful atavar you have, love it, did you make it yourself? -
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No, Kat made it (Sensual Angel) with her new corel something program. I love it! ^_^
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