sifted through
like grains of sand
but the gold has melted--
in sun
now sumptuous glass
with oily fingerprints
A contest entry
- 20 words or less - ends tonight by sheltered.
550 points, ended November 2, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A pretty picture.
Keep writing poet--you'll hit your vein of gold.
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i think sifted would have worked better
but the imagery was strong -
oh, this is dirtypretty. and not like the "style" of poetry found on here.
reminds me of the movie dirty pretty things... can't tell you why though lol.
i like this.
helen~
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lol thanks for checkin it out. much love
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