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Autumn Reveling

Brisk Autumn wind,
Cool grass on calloused feet.
Red rustling trees,
The murmurs of the street.
A muted sky,
A flock of south-bent birds.
My dog with me,
No cause for any words.

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  • Room without doors gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    Outstanding

    You capture autumn perfectly. The imagery is very strong in this poem and I liked how you described the landscape at the beginning and then made it more human and personal at the end- out walking the dog. An excellent poem.

  • powerofpoetry
    November 3, 2008
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    yeah its about a woman


  • The Fun House silver member
    November 2, 2008

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    I really like the personal touch of this piece. I can so easily relate to it and it is very well written to boot. NICE JOB!

  • TrippinBTM
    November 1, 2008
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    Very nice, kinda reminds me of fall...

    Seriously though, I like your poem.