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brewed -GOLD




I'm purely bony fingers
and top notch lines,

stirring a familiar emptiness
beneath pallid gazes-


tripping on
the slender
things.
















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Twenty words of whatever I want.

Nothing lasts forever,
even cold November rain

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  • Rheea gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    well you two liked this so it must be good I don't get it. But I don't get metaphors with in metaphors explain it to me already?


    • Lj-
      November 2, 2008
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      I can't really explain much of what I write to others, I leave to up to the reader to make it their own.
      These words are just what I was experiencing when I sat down to write this.



      • Rheea gold member
        November 2, 2008
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        I guess that is a type of poetry that is beyond me. Congratulations on the gold.


  • sheltered
    November 2, 2008
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    is that guns and roses?


  • sheltered
    November 2, 2008

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    holy jumpins
    where did you come from?
    that's two in a row and i had no idea it was you
    good on ya


  • sheltered
    November 2, 2008
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    just wow for now


  • nancy drew
    November 2, 2008
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    pretty, sad and cold. it's very good.

    helen~

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