You said, "I'll be there"
But where are you now?
You broke the promise,
You broke the vow.
"I'm here for you"
Was another lie
And so tonight
Is when I cry.
I shouldn't believe you
I shouldn't care
But in my heart
You are held dear
To my wrist
I place a knife
With a broken smile
I end my life...
Author notes
Option chosen: 1
I wrote this poem somewhere around...July 17th, 2008, but never decided to post it. Oh well, it's getting posted now. I'm not fond of this poem but it seemed to suit this contest. So enjoy ^^
∞ Anneliese ∞
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A contest entry
- Lovvvvve by fake-or-real-smile.
550 points, ended November 3, 2008, 50 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Heartbreak Hotel by neenz.
900 points, ended November 10, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Whoa. The emotion was intense, and the rhyming was pretty good.
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short, sad, sweet, i like it!
Thank you for the entry.
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Wow *is kind of speechless*
I like this. I like this a lot. It's so short but simple. And that is a fantastic thing sometimes.
This piece actually reminds me of something I once wrote.
I'm guessing it's about a love who let you down?
I love the lines:
"You broke the promise,
You broke the vow."
and
"And so tonight
Is when I cry."
Well done, thanks for entering and good luck.
Rebecca
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yeah it was a love who let me down...
Thanks for your comment it makes me happy that someone liked it ^_^
∞ Anneliese ∞
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