Shattered, they say in England,
meaning tired. And I see
the glass shards from
a dropped mirror.
I'm so tired
I can't put
myself
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Author notes
Yes, I know, it's a gimmick, not something I normally do. Hope you count "together" as one word, not 8.
25 words
A contest entry
- 8 entrys, 25 words, don't dissapoint. by catalyst..
550 points, ended November 2, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So, what's your opinion of this?
Comments
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This seemed personal, but indifferent
I like that -
I always thought shattered meant sad. Interesting. I wouldn't appologize or demean your write by saying this is a gimmic. I can get a genuine feeling from seeing the word broken and dripping like this.
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Good take I could feel it dropping.
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veyr nice
that was pretty clever
good luck
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