Two people leave the ocean
to walk upon the shore
A husband and a lover
go hand in hand once more.
She'd waited for a lifetime
to bathe within the sea
The time was long in coming
to set her spirit free.
No longer dear departed
the sea gave him new life
Returned a decade later
to reclaim his lost wife.
Barefoot they walk together
no footprints touch the shore
for they reside in Heaven
to live for evermore.
Author notes
Option "2"
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Options by piccola.
900 points, ended November 4, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Key thought, resuming the walk together in death
"Two people leave the oceanto walk upon the shore" - "for they reside in Heaven to live for evermore." You make reference to "spirit free" which suggests only in this resumed relationship do each experience true freedom. Gives new meaning to the marriage rite which proclaims a man and woman in marriage as One Flesh doesn't it? Thank you for this thought provoking poem.
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Well done! I love the last stanza, bittersweet. Congrats on your silver!
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Wow Ros thats incredable tender and loving but not overbearing. Its been to long since I read your writing and I regret it more now that I see what I've been missing. I loved the rhyme and the flow was impecable and incredable. You did a great job with this one. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a beautiful poem you have written.
The imagery is lovely and comforts the soul
I like the BG you have chosen it fits nicely.
Best of wishes to you.
Tony
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Bravo,
I really like the ending. Good luck in the contest.
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