shattered
dropped from highest peaks
[[your arms]]
onto tile floors
brain damage
was nothing compared to how
you left me
never raise my hopes again
Author notes
prompt: shattered
i hope that you like this
im sorry if i let you down.
A contest entry
- 8 entrys, 25 words, don't dissapoint. by catalyst..
550 points, ended November 2, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wonderful
Congrats
pappi
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I really loved this. The flow, metaphors and especially the ending. great write
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i lurrrve the ending!
this is so good in 25 words
i really felt the emotion and the anger especially in the last line.
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This is cute and sad. I know what its like. Well done.
Dani.
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that bastard.
if i could fly then i wud totally avenge u.
lol
i am so amused today. i blame the strokes.
:]
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i wish that you could
=]
hahahah
and i love the strokes
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hahah
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Sad, but good imagery.
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Good use of the prompt, shattered in the psychological and emotional sense. It's a horrible feeling.
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thanks
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no disappointment here...an amazing take on the prompt...an excellent, powerfully packed write. Nicely done.
Shelly
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thank you
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I really love this take on the prompt... that heartache can never be captured enough. Good luck to you.
♥
whisper
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thank you
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Let me down?
It could never happen when you are trying to do what you can. Writing effects people in different ways and sometimes the message between the lines is better than the words themselves. We all suffer loss and we have to go on anyway. Giving up just is not an option. Hurt as it may, you will trust and love again. Proubly get hurt a time or two and yet you will find the ability to do it all over. That is life. Those that find their loves early will find heartakes in other ways. We live, we grow, and we learn, some just learn slower than others(my case). I love ya and am here for you if the need be! The Shaker
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thank you for your kind words
but this is just make believe
i really dont feel like this
and im glad that i didnt let you down
<33
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