Your love for me is nonexistent
My love for you has nearly ceased
We never knew eachother
But slowly and surely our story was pieced
The love note was written without delay
In a bout of schoolgirl love
If I thought you'd ever care for me
I don't know what I was thinking of
Your angry face and skater clothes
Your shirt that held a wilted rose
Your unbearable smile
Made my heart jump a mile
You read the note speechlessly
I didn't even know, my heart was still aglow
That stupid letter confused and hurt you
You didn't know which way to go
So I cried into my pillow
Your angry words echoing in my head
Anyone who came would think
That I was just in bed
Now we just ignore eachother
Our love seemingly gone
But anybody who would look at me
Would know that statement was wrong
Author notes
This poem is a true story.
A contest entry
- Whispers of the Muse by SubKitten.
3045 points, ended May 19, 173 entries
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This is a very emotional piece. The flow is a bit choppy with the way the lines are broken up and the lack of punctuation. The rhyme scheme works well for the most part, except for the sudden change where you have the two couplet lines in a row. That really throws off the previously established flow, and kinda sends the reader for a loop.
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me too.
i'm here too.p.s. tell me who it is bcause i thought it was aaron. -
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Is this about....what's his name....Alan. I'm really sorry!!!rember i'm always here for you{ ps. message me about who it is }. It's funny{ well I know it's not to you, but} i just finished reading twilight...and this rteminded me of it.
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Thank you so much for the comment! I just messaged you... So yeah. Thanks again!
~Emmzydoodle
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Thanks fro brining this to us.
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You are quite completely welcome.
~Emmz
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wow
i feel that way alot lately. This poem is either real or you are a very good poest.
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Yes, this is real... And I'm a really good poet!
At least in my opinion. Thanks so much for the comment!
~Emmz
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