Longing for the breeze
not to pass,
but feel;
a make-shift tune
that falters the ground
as the leaves turn to sky
[you will never belong]
for the world,
knows not your name
nor your existence.
Author notes
Prompt: Orphan
no more than 50words.
un-relatable (yes i sorta made it up or so thats what word processor tells me 
)
A contest entry
- Word Prompt I - by Manda Kathryn.
400 points, ended November 17, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You mean un-relatable isn't a word
Well I think it is 
This is gripping; the first stanza really captured my imagition and then I couldn't bare for this to end
Fabulous poem!
♥
Thank You for Your Entry & Best of Luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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now this was good, conveyed some fantastic connotations and by using the minimal style you have found your own.
opening stanza in particular.
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Ugh... your writing always astounds me. Damnit, why do you have to be so good at this, Stephanie?!?! Haha, that's just the jealousy speaking. But seriously, this is incredibly. You definitely deserve to place with this... everything about it is so perfect. You truly are an amazing writer. Keep it up!!
♣ Tegan
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This is really good. There is no best part. Its all the best.
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WONDERFUL!!!!
That alone feeling is a sad and painful one indeed
I belive all of us have felt it from time to time and always it tears at our hearts and saddens out minds.
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a poem that i found good untill the last two lines when i found it great, once again a very meaningful and special poem
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