wore my heart
on your sleeve
in eyes the sun
shone, renewed
you stole the diamonds
sparkling in the sky
handed them to me
with open arms
now only a paper moon
sits high on the horizon
while we wait
Author notes
Prompt: waiting for the moon
30-40 words
In a list
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #28 by AutumnGypsy.
550 points, ended November 6, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is wonderful, I felt a part of me hidden inside this poem, you words touched me. Thank you. Best to you in the contest
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Thank You
ty for the honor of bronze, your prompt made it an easy write.
Juls
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I love your title =) My favorite parts were definitely "In eyes the sun/shone, renewed/you stole the diamonds/sparkling in the sky." The use of "diamonds" was very appropriate. Well done!
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I loved the play ...
between sun and moon. It always works wonders ...
Beautifully poemed.
Love
Myra
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Excellent C
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well she asked for words of brilliance, and you deliverd, job done in my eyes.
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