The full moon overhead
Stars glittering dimly in mesmerizing ways
the hushed trickle of a slow flowing river
as it flows by reflecting the moon and the stars
soft music of a lute as it is gently strummed
in the soft blue light of the night by the river
wild flower grow, and thin forests grow near
The figure of a woman with long ringlet curls
dances in the moonlight to the sound of the soft music
twirling and moving like the grass
as the gentle breeze blows over it in waves
her eyes sparkle reflecting the stars
she giggles, a wind chime sound
as the one playing the lute winks at her
He watches her with interest
a guarded yet warm eye smiling as she moved
not missing a note as he strums his lute playing it
ever so gently to the breeze, the river, the stars and the moon
nothing could intterupt this perfect night
the night of the full moon's dance
the peace between these two and their night
their night of beauty
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A contest entry
- "Prewrites " + Plus by wingsofgold25.
600 points, ended November 20, 2008, 67 entries
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For all those midnight dreamers out there
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Thanks for entering!
Very vivid description here, and I loved the idea of a lute, it's such an exotic instrument! I got excited as I genuinely do have natural ringlets, and I almost felt flung into the poem! I would add some more punctuation, however, to make sure it's easy to read, and I'd have preferred it left aligned, but don't listen to me, not many people do!
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Nice imaginative words. You created such a picture. It's beautiful. Nothing like sweet romance. Wonderful write. Good luck in my contest.
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Beautiful
It was indeed a beautiful write. I could see it all happening. The woman dancing in the moonlight,the man playing music for her...and even though you never stated anything that was romantic,your hints gave it away. I could just feel the power of love radiating from this poem. Like...a secret relationship between two people. Excellent. Keep it up Dani.
-Michael
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A step up in skill
with a very romantic sensual write. You created a moonlit night of romance.
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This is realy good I love it Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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beautiful dreamily romantic nice to get lost in that imagery
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wow my aussie sure has a way with word. You write enticed my mind and captured my interest so ounce i started i couldnt stop........simply beautiful like you
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loved it
stunning
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