Falling and taking you in, beginning to slip
Drunk off of your essence, needing one more sip
Soaked into my every pore
Im addicted needing more
Bleeding you through my skin
Wondering where you have been
All my life theres been a void inside
Cracked and weathered no place to hide
Renewed life arises through the blackened
Entangles a moment that has intoxicated
Striking with a brief moment of solitude
Veins filling with warmth of gratitude
A feeling of closeness that elates
Kept apart that aggrivates
A long and worthless trip
I intake another sip
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'Bleeding you through my skin' is a great line, if it was meant in the way I interpreted it - if it was, then maybe it would be helping to add 'I cry you through my eyes' or something in the sense. 'Veins filling with warmth of gratitude' connects very nice to it, as well, and I see it as blood and all liquids being the transport of love - going in, going out. Great piece of work
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Thank you for your input.
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