Jessamine stirred
beneath unwed toes
longing for sleep ~
and the silver penny brilliance of the night sky
reached down
to spend among the fields
where I stood
broken
crying for the moon
Author notes
Prompt: waiting for the moon
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #28 by Aussie Gypsy.
550 points, ended November 6, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is pure beauty, I was left with a sigh in my heart with this wonder. Beautiful story telling and imagery. Best to you in the contest
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I love the phrase "silver penny brilliance." It stood out beautifully and vividly. Great imagery! Nice take on the prompt and good luck in the contest!
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excellent
Awesome poem sweetie
Best of luck in the contest
Tis a winner in my book
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Excellent
A stimulating message. The emotion draws your reader into the poem. Great job. Don
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