I hear an echo in my brain
telling me I'm insane
I don't wanna hear this anymore.
I can't understand why
These emotions make me wanna die
I can hear my body hit the floor.
I'm insane, I'm insane!
I'll play your little game-
just don't look me in the eye!
Cause you make me wanna die
Oh soooo much more...
Break me once-break me twice
A blade, a hammer, or gun should suffice
Break me till I'm completely shattered
You'll see nothing matters-
Anymore.
I listen to what you say
And it makes me so afraid
Cause deep down I'm thinking it's true.
We exchange words and advice
Some are naughty; some are nice
But in the end, I'm looking up you.
I'm insane, I'm insane!
I'll play this little game-
just don't look me in the eye!
Cause you make me wanna die-
Oh sooo much more...
Break me once-break me twice
A blade, a hammer, or gun should suffice
Break me till I'm completely shattered
You'll see nothing matters-
Anymore.
Insanity wasn't a choice
You can hear it in my voice
But it's so much easier to agree with you.
Cause I don't wanna fight
We're gonna be at it all night
In the end-even if it's not-it will become true.
Break me once-break me twice
A blade, a hammer, or gun should suffice
Break me till I'm completely shattered
You'll see nothing matters-
Anymore.
Anymore. [x4]
A contest entry
- Anything Goes! by vampireblood.
475 points, ended November 15, 2008, 26 entries
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Would make a nice song
As I was reading this piece, I kept thinking this could be a song, And sure enough it is. Great lyrics and it flows quite well, somebody with the gift of the gab could turn this song into gold, for it does have the right feel. There is a lot of emotion thrown into this song, well done and best of luck in the contest.
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I love this!
There was alot of imagery present in your lyrics. Very nicely done.
Although, just a little advice. Change "Cuz" to "Cause". You dont have to, but I think it would look better.
Overall great write, I like it alot.
Thank you for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
Vampy -
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Thanks, I didn't know if I should spell it the short way for effect of the song, or if I should spell it correctly, but I think you're right, it looks better. Thanks!
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just a side note (sorry)
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intersting, not really what i would write, but it is good.
keep up the good work with your poetry -
You've a gift my friend. You're songs are very accessible but there's alot to read into. Keep on sharing, reading your stuff is a joy.
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