land of wind and fog
waits in stifling silence
now I can not sleep
no evening winds to sooth me
as my house sings her duet
waits in stifling silence
now I can not sleep
no evening winds to sooth me
as my house sings her duet
Author notes
written while waiting for hurricane Hannah
In a list
- A Seasonal Heart group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Time Change-Write a Tanka by azure85.
900 points, ended November 12, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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land of wind and fog
waits in stifling silence
- the hazy swirls of smoke-ridden mother nature are blown into the waiting game, where silence strikes silence with aplomb. a good poem.
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my humble thanks and a grin
ah my world, foggy sleepy rocky tor this is an oldy,
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It's beautiful, hun, and congrats on the well-deserved Gold! Annoying critic says: what is the purpose of the comma? Is it important in the meaning? I think it breaks the rhythm, but I'm probably missing something.
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one of my first tries
think the coma was a burp, removed beloved annoying critic
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Congrats on the gold!
I hope you enjoyed this moment. You have received recognition for your work another sign of your growth here
. Well done, Drag Aine! 
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Well done! Unique and fresh imagery conjured up in this poem, congrats on the Gold Trophy!
Dennis
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stunned
for a change I am speechless, thank you
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land of wind and fog
waits in stifling silence
now I can not sleep
no evening winds to sooth me
as my house sings, her duet
The sound of the wind, building up in momentum with the hurricane, all these thoughts within your tanka. I enjoyed you ending, very descriptive and full of meaning, thank you so much.
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thank you
thank I ma humbled
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