how do you stem the flow of tears?
when everywhere you turn
there lies a memory of what was
cheeks withering rapidly
as layers of skin become laden
with the bitter stain of goodbye
hours pass,
dreaming about your candid smile
gracing my path once again
knowing that it will never be
I resolve to trust in fate
and that somewhere there is a hand
waiting for me to reach out and take hold
so I may be rescued from blinding shadows
now the only tears that fall
are the ones that promise redemption
dooming the darkness to recede
into the chasms of neglected thought.
Author notes
title prompt 29: Darkness is doomed
A contest entry
- Title Prompts! by JustSimplyLissa.
600 points, ended November 14, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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very well done
great flow , perfect transition
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Wonderful write. I love how you went from dispear to hope and the transition is seemless. Beautifully written.
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You did a wonderful job with this piece my friend. The whole thing overflows with imagery. Good luck in the contest.
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Bittersweet beautiful, Cuz!
This is so lovely!
"I resolve to trust in fate
and that somewhere there is a hand
waiting for me to reach out and take hold
so I may be rescued from blinding shadows"
Those lines left a tear...
Amazing as always, Cuz
Lynda
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