The sand
was quick at
sinking my heart...
Buried my love
and swept it
out to sea.
I walk that shore
on every dawn
to see if the tide
brings it back...
But all I find
are shells
without echoes.
In a list
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #27 by Aussie Gypsy.
550 points, ended November 2, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Eventually it comes back, but hey if you find another one around... It may belong to me. I also have shells without echoes... I think the judges missed this....
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What a wonderful illustration
I live near a beach and have watched sandcastles and beach writing erased by the sea. The erasure is permanent. Your poems are used to describe the human condition. Trust and comfort zone may be erased, but memories remain of something precious lost, and there's a lifetime resentment and frustration in that loss. I'm sure many of your readers will relate to this poem.
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Brilliantly Beautiful Melancholy...
Oh, I absolutely LOVE this poem!! 
Quick Sand" is a winner in my mind, and whether or not the contest host thinks so is irrelevant. This is a perfect masterpiece!! 
Thank you for sharing your muse's inspiring (though bittersweet), mesmerizing, poetic thoughts!! Peace, love & hugs, xx Cyn xx 
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Wow. Very tight, great images
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I really loved this piece but it needs a serious spellcheck in the first few lines, it was disappointing to see mistakes. Best to you in the contest
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So sorry to disappoint, computer was playing up and i couldn't get back to edit. Thanks for your kind comment anyhow.
Dolores x
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Awesome
So few lines and depicting how our emotions are washed away, I love the beach and the solitude I feel there, comfort at times...I love the but all i find are shells without echoes.
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Thank you for the kind comment.
Much apreciated. x
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wow! shells without echoes... sad but damn woman this is Brilliance!
Juls
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Ta ta Juls!
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Beautifully done
I found your kind heart washed up on the shore over here across the big pond. I have it tucked next to mine, to keep it warm. Let me know when you need it back.
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