She is a lovely Mum,
Sometimes she goes all numb.
I hate it when she has a hospital stay
Sometimes all we can do is pray.
I feel sorry for her
Because she is ill
She's having chemo
Which is a pill.
She is lovely because she hugs me tight
And kisses me when she tucks me in at night.
I cry 'cause she might die.
I help her by doing lots of things.
Soon, she might have wings.
But I don't want that day to come,
Because I really love my Mum.
Author notes
This is about my Mum.
I wrote it myself, my big sister Walking Oxymoron helped me with grammar.
(I chose to love my mum forever, and I'll remember loving her.)
She is in remission now.
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800 points, ended December 19, 2008, 21 entries
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it's really great (and important) that you love your mom. i'm glad she has your support--
good work!
gl
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this is a very amosional poem and it must realy mean something to you im gonna give you
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sorry for your mom and cheers for your mom
sorry that she is ill.....i hope and pray that she gets well soon and be with her sooooo talented daughter
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Precious =)
You are a very strong, very brave girl! I'm proud of you and I don't even know you! I'm so glad you have poetry as an outlet....it's such a great thing =)
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Very nice poem about your mom. She's very lucky to have been blessed having you in her life. May you guys spend many more happy, happy years together. Thank you very much for sharing this. Well done.
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i can't even being to think about what to say here, this poem is just strong in every sense of the word, i mean i hope you mother gets better, you are a very brave poet, keep it flowing
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this is such a sweet poem honey, I am sure your mum and your big sister are really proud of you... such words of love are never wasted, I hope that your mum does get better and that your lives will be happy and full of love! xxx
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You are right... I'm very proud of her.
She's my lush lil one...
Stronger then I'll ever be!
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Profound
My heart and mind are in a new place at this time surrounded in all thought of you and your family.
Bless you all.
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I know what your going through and for someone of your age you have shown tremendous love and bravery in being able to write about it, your mum is so proud of you i know this because you can write beautifully and are obviously a very mature and compassionate person. What your mummy needs it support, and this is what you are giving her. I wish you and your mum all the happiness in the world and strength but i know you have this already.
If only the world had more people as loving as you
take care
stay strong
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Aww. I love this poem, it's really aweet, and I'm sure your mom loves it too. It's very heartwarming and special
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Dear KGK
You are indeed a very brave, loyal and loving young lady.
Fight the good fight
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I'm sure your mum will be really proud of you. This poem is a wonderful show of your strength and love. My very best wishes to you and your family. sj
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My heart goes out to you and your mum. I am sorry she is ill, and I know what it is like to wonder about tomorrow, but you are a most lovely daughter, for you know the importance of loving right now.
Arms around you little one!
The poem is a most beautiful treasure of the heart.
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wow. How sad,crying. well writte
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awh.. heartbreaking..
Soon, she might have wings.
I loved that line. It almost made me cry!
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This poem is heartbreaking and so amazingly written, you are so talented for someone so young; no one your age should have to experience what you are. I wish your mum health, I would wish you strength as well, but you already are displaying so much more than I ever could. I am sure that your mum is very proud to have such a strong, talented and caring daughter. Once again this is an amazing poem, a wonderful expression of your love. I think I will be thinking of this poem for a long time to come, and like I said wishing your mum health.
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Tearful
Wow, right now, I'm shaken by how strong you're being for your mom, especially at such a young age, having to go through that. I've got tears in the corners of my eyes thinking about how it feels and remembering how I felt when I went through that with my dad. My prayers are with you and your family.
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Such a great a moving piece. Keep up the good work... Best wishes to your family. I'll Keep them in my prayers
>Waka<
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wow....she's so young yet forced to be so brave.....sad that people this young have to go through things that even older people cant make it through on there own.
great poem -
you are the light in your mums darkness;
shine bright and hold her tight.
I wish you all the best.
Ken
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Amazing
You have a gift, being able to let things out in this way. Not only does it give you chance to vent, but as you can see by all the wonderful comments there are people all round the world that can give you a shoulder to cry on should you need it because you were brave enough to share these feelings with them. You really are brave and talented, and i wish you all the best. I will pray for you, and ask my church to pray too. Much love and best wishes to you!
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Awww darling. This totally reminded me of what I had to go through when I lost my Mom. Please know that your Mom loves you to bits and pieces and she is so proud of you! You're so strong!!!!!! I'll pray for you and your Mom and your family!!
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you just brought tears to my eyes, everything will be fine sweetie, just continue with this lovely way of expressing your love..
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this is beautiful. i could tell you really love her. poetry is a great way to express your feelings and worries. keep it up. don't give up. hang in there. i wish your mom health.
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Your mom must be so proud of you, because you are a little girl gifted with a wonderful heart and a wonderful way of expressing your love for your mum.
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Great job honey, just hang in there I'll put you in my prayers. You're so strong
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your are beautiful and a very brave little girl.
I don't believe I have ever read such a beautiful poem, I will pray everyday for your mom, I am going to bookmark this so I can red it everyday to remind me to pray.
May God bless you and Mom and family...
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Beautiful
I loved it darling. Your sister was sweet to help you and I have a little boy your age who said he enjoyed it too. I hope your mum doesn't get her wings just yet...you deserve lots of hugs.'s Fantastic sweetheart. ~Mandie~
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this is purely heartbreaking & beautiful in a really devastating way. this is incredibly powerful & really displays love.
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This is heartbreaking. So sorry that you and your mum have to go through this. I know she really must appreciate all the help you give her. I bet she likes the hugs the best. She must be so proud of you. This poem is very well written. You did a GREAT job on this!
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That is a really well written poem, well done. I will be praying that God watches over your mum and gives you peace. We're all thinking of you.
Love Sarah
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Aw, sweetie. This was so sweet and sad. I'm sure your mum is proud of you for loving her so much and taking care of her. You're good at rhyming. :]
Be strong and full of love
♥ Dizu
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well done . . lovely sentiments . .
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Oh dear... I hate it when people have to suffer from illnesses.
This poem is really sad, but well written. It's easy to see how much you love your Mum, I'm sure she's really proud to have such a loving daughter!
Your Mum will be in my thoughts and prayers!
I wish you all the best!
Annie
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Beautiful
Blessings to you and your family and a for you. Keep on writing I loved reading your poem. -
a nice poem, but sad story. I hope everything is ok. Give your mum a big hug to show your love!
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Excellent~
Give your Mum a great big hug .
You did great!!!
Joe
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wowee
very sweet kim and also such a sad story, I am sorry that your mum is poorly and I love these lines
She is lovely because she hugs me tight
And kisses me when she tucks me in at night.
((((((hugs)))))) Keep your head up and welldone for your sister helping you with this, keep writing as it's healthy for you to get it all out!! :-) xxxxxx
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Yeah Kimbob, I know it's evil....
I love Mum too!!
You'll be famous when you're older!! I tell you.
Love you, Gorgeous!
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