I used to look forward to the end of the day
After cleanin' them stalls and stackin' the hay
Fun as all that work I did was
I knew something better was still yet to come
Used to run 'round with my ol' dog by my side
Just a little gal wantin' a tractor ride
Wearin' my brothers clothes and my hair pulled back tight
The end of the day in my narrow sight
Would ride the horses 'round the corral
And we would have so much fun 'til the sun would go down
Then I would feed 'em then brush 'em down
Ride with the wind to meet Daddy comin' home from town
We stand on the hill, me him and that dog
Silently still watchin' through the fog
Hand on my shoulder and not a word gets spoken
But I can feel his pride though silence ain't never been broken
His lil' gal helpin' out on the farm
Doin' hard work and keepin' from harm
But then when August starts up and summer begins to end
It's back to Mama's house, and reality begins
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A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Options by piccola.
900 points, ended November 4, 2008, 6 entries
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Comments
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Nice memory
I think you need to reread it, I think you may have left a word out, "And would have so mush 'till the sun would go down." I think maybe I would have said it like this, "And we had so much fun, untill the sun went down."The next line I think, and this is just my opinion, should be, "I'd feed and brush her/him, while she/he pranced around. In line 2 maybe, the stall instead of them stalls. Just trying to be helpful not hurtful. Good luck in the contest.
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