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Nothing left

I gave you my soul,
My heart, my mind.
Now it is up to you
to find

Out how you can
make all of this right.
But there is no way
that you can despite

The things that you
do to help me.
Is there something wrong?
Why can't you see?

I have given you everything
That I possibly can.
And now I have

Nothing left...

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Option #2.

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  • liduen silver member
    November 2, 2008

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    This poem is tied together very well. It is very effective in making the reader feel sad and empty.

    Nice background by the way.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest