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I love the wind
The bitter chill it brings
Out of all the elements
It's the only one that will play with me

It stimulates the senses
With a tickling breeze
It looks so beautiful
When its moving the trees

The chimes sound so joyful
The neverending theme
Of a spinning world
That never gets dizzy

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  • Cannonsfire
    November 8, 2008
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    Could have a tad more showing and metaphor in this rather than just telling, but a nice job. C


  • thepoetssoul
    November 8, 2008

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    Nice work on your poem here.
    The wind is a beautiful thing indeed.
    Thanks for the entry
    Best of wishes to you.

    Tony

  • Judith Chandler
    October 31, 2008

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    a nice playful write that makes me want to go out and play. The wind is indeed a part of nature that's always present, even in the city.

  • StarGrrl
    October 31, 2008

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    Great Write. Interesting topic too, never read a poem where someone likes the bitter chill of the wind. I like the line "it's the only one that will play with me," great idea. Good write. Let me know if you want a more detailed critique.