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Spark the Flames

Each lesson learned is one small spark
that sets the mark of our flame,
Now our knowledge we should share,
with no care for love or fame.

Skills that die with their master
are forever lost to all,
one passed to another’s hand
to be candid, will remain.

Let your fire of wisdom shine
as those in line want to learn
and your light will always glow
above, below, the flames burn.

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Form: awdl gywydd

Prompt: If you have knowledge, let others light their candle in it. (Margaret Fuller)

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  • Welshbard
    March 6

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    Evocative

    As I am a creative writer, this poem meant a lot to me, especially the second stanza: Skills that die with their master/are forever lost to all,/one passed to another's hand/to be candid, will remain. Beautiful! Brought tears to my eyes. For years I have tried to pay forward by teaching others what I know; this poem effectively, in a few short lines, captures that feeling.


    • Ceridwens Soul silver member
      March 6
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      This is my favourite of my awdl gywydds for the very reasons you are mentioning. My craft is art and yes it was about sharing those skills I have with others. I glad it has that message though sorry for the tears. I do really appreciate your comment here -- thank you

  • Purrsanthema
    February 9

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    I'm a third generation fine artist, so the second stanza hits me pretty hard. Is there any particular reason why you chose not to rhyme line 8 with line 6? I do not know the delicate demands of the elegant form you're using but my mind nips it a little. "Skills that die with their master/
    are forever lost to all,/" There is no way you could improve on this. Bravo! Here's a thought for you to play with:" Those passed to another's hand/to be candid, never fall."


    • Ceridwens Soul silver member
      February 9
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      Dayum that slipped through, thanks for spotting that.

      Yes this one is dedicated to those of us who create pictures. I am an artist and illustrator
      as yet I rarely combine the two and illustrate myself.

      Ok the form is a four line stanza using 7 syllable lines.

      The rhyme schem is the meter

      xxxxxxa
      xxxaxxb
      xxxxxxc
      xxxcxxb

      a and c can be syllable 3 or 4 of line 2 and 4 and can be any type of rhyme. b should be a perfect rhyme.

      It was originally a sung poem accompanied by a Welsh harp for eisteffods. Also because the rhyme generates a rhythm in the Welsh language it was also popular for dancing.