As autumn brings vibrant shades
the sun fades towards year’s end.
Trees of green now golden red,
their leaves shed and colours blend.
Nature’s brightest palette forms
in wind and storms over land,
inspired art in paint and ink
as minds think with fall at hand.
Bonfires and feasting begin,
as snowflakes spin the world white.
The end of one leads to new,
in winter’s view, land so bright.
We watch in awe and wonder,
hear the thunder, lightning bolt.
Yet feel delight of seasons
year’s reasons do not revolt.
Author notes
Form: awdl gywydd
In a list
A contest entry
- Winter Poetry by misticmoonlite.
575 points, ended November 13, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Autumn Poetry Contest by FloridaGatorQueen.
525 points, ended September 30, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is very beautifully written. I loved the imagery. I could picture the change from fall to winter in my mind. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest
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I liked this poem very much, down to the last line. "Year's reasons do not revolt" didn't resonate for me. I do like the other three lines in this stanza, however, so if you do wish to revise this, keep that feeling of awe and wonder with the lightning and thunder! The more I read your poetry written in Awdl Gywydd form, the more I like that form. I've long meant to write more poetry in the Welsh Metres, and this metre is a good one to start with.
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ddiloch Bard. Its been a while since I looked at this one and yes you are right --- so this piece is now in my edit pile ( ever growing pile that is). The form is lovely to write once you get into the rhythm it kind of writes itself at times.
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I'm especially fond of line 10: "as snowflakes spin the world white"
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Thank you
I like the Welsh forms and using rhyme to make the meter but then that is the Taff in me.
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Rhyme tie stanza together. The reader feels the season move from summer to autumn as color change and landscape await winter to a world of white. Lovely images, your form fit the mood and intent. Good luck with the contest.
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very strong piece,and detailed form, thank you for this entry, good luck
Linda
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painting with words also leave in us awe and wonder and i think you can do that also....enjoyed this nice poem
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Thank you so much
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Nice poem. I like the way it is written. It describes the feeling of Fall/Winter so well.
I am not sure how the definition works though...I have never seen this word before, but when I think of the meaning of the word in that sentence it doesn't seem to fit for me.
I see what you meant, "err" standing for "wandering" in that sentence. However, I would think of a way to revise it, as wandering in general and wandering from a direct course at random are different.
But that is just my take on things. I thought the poem was great and others might not see things the same way as me.
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Thank you for your comment.
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