What is this, if not passion
The feeling of something unusual
Waiting to be caressed, wanting to explode,
What if I get that heavenly touch
For which my body has been aching
Will I remain what I am
Or will the entwining of the bodies
Lead me to something ethereal
I am confused, do not know how to react
But what I know is that I yearn for that touch
A soothing touch of caress
And a wild sensation of fulfillment.
Author notes
That's how I felt, the first time I looked into my lovers eyes.
He did not only paralyze me mentally, but physically- I was on fire!
A contest entry
- Love At First Sight by celadia.
900 points, ended November 6, 2008, 11 entries
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How sweet the truth
within each heart beats the need to belong to the other,fulfilling ones other personal half. For some flesh, for others soul, but an eternal blissful enjoining that yearns for breath.
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Oh, don't we all. This is hot. I just feel the fire in it. What a torrid piece you have written here.
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thats the good stuff indeed. follow it all the way to the end, for the good the bad and the ugly. feelings of that intensity are a gem in life as long as we can cope with the death of them which brings that polar swing just as hard the other way.
yeah, i think that come out right. -
uh oh. I accidentally walked into the back door. I'm awful with directions..lol.
Actually, for a write of this type, you've done splendidly. Albeit for a few words that could use different words, it is adequate to the subject matter.
Ahem. LOL.
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this is a beautiful, emotive piece well written and laid out, thank you for entering my contest. The whole piece hangs together well, each line is as strong as the one before and after it and it makes a strong statement with out being sentimental or overpowering.
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