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Once Mines





I seen them throwing popcorn
at the bejeweled sky
of greedy gulls

The longitude of her smile
stretched through the atlas
of my abjectness

When she was mines
her shine seemed dull

Now with him
she illumes rays of growth

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Prompt: regret's shore
30-40 words (used 40 words)

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  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    This was a great piece, a few spelling errors in it which was sad for a good poem. Best to you in the contest


  • righteousme
    November 1, 2008
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    beautiful ... loving and longing ... the regret ... good luck in the contest!!!