Oh God
when you called me
I over looked
all my conducts were jet black
from top to bottom
not leaving any choice
to gain access for to-and-fro link
yet you are very generous
and very high-minded
holding our connections organic
making my borders composed
Oh God...
In a list
A contest entry
- When you called me... by 2lullabyhaven.
650 points, ended November 19, 2008, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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OH GOD!
Awesome job! I really felt the emotion behind this piece! An A+ job! Keep up the awesome work adn thanks so much for the share! I really am looking forward to reading more of your work....which I probably have already............ I read a lot of stuff on here and try to comment on everyones....Sorry for my mindless ramblings.............HAHA!!!!!
Again.....Thanks so much for the brilliant write and share! Good luck with future writes....but judging from this, you don't really need much luck!!!!!
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yet you are very generous...This line says it all and so much more...thanks for your entry and good luck in my contest
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the more I read you, the more I like your style. I have never read another one like it. Your special. Good luck in contest
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OMG!! The last line was amazing, such hambleness!! the kind I always used to expect from you to God. This was amazing.
"yet you make my borders
composed when I replicate your surname
Humans are very selfish and so obssessed with themselves. Wonderful write. Best of luck to you in the contest!
~Noor
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sincerity always flows through your writes
you are very generous
and very high minded
which holds our connection organic
the beauty and simplicity of the line is refreshing and flows softly
God bless you my friend...
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