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Held By Regret



Weathered hearts sift through
grains of time,
tides wash upon chilled souls
cutting open old wounds,

deep sorrow of profound empathy,
reaching through the waters
to turn back moments,
where words can be whispered
with hope in mind, "please don't go".

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • carole21
    November 8, 2008

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    very nicely penned . . liked "tides wash upon chilled souls" and "deep sorrow of profound empathy" . . congrats on the silver


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 4, 2008

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    Congrats on the silver!

    Your words are lined with desperate sorrow, such wonderful imagery portrayed thoughout. A very touching piece, congrats on the much deserved trophy


  • Grey Mouser
    November 2, 2008
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    oops, missed the clappies


  • Grey Mouser
    November 2, 2008

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    Very well done. Capturing the prompt with precise emotion and sorrow. One often holds those past regrets close, thinking how things could have been different eith the right words. Congratulations on the well earned SIlver sweetheart.

    Love
    Sun and stars shine no brighter than you!


  • Glasyalabolas
    November 2, 2008

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    It is very easy to relate to this, but not easy to relate ot it without feeling pain.

    Good write.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    Tears rise in my eyes when I read this, for so many experiences in my own life lately have warrented the screaming of those words, yet there is silence. Best to you in the contest


  • Swan song gold member
    November 1, 2008
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    Now you broke my heart. This was nothing less than stunningly beautiful!


  • Firequeen
    November 1, 2008

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    beautiful but sad
    short write but it speaks volumes.
    the imagrey is beautiful and flows like water.
    Thank you for sharing the gift of your poetry.
    Fire


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 1, 2008

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    Had to go check out the prompt after reading this beauty! I think you captured it perfectly sis


  • Venugopal gold member
    October 31, 2008
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    very nice poem I read, thank you for sharing


  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    October 31, 2008

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    Very Nice

    I enjoyed the flow and imagery of this one very much. A very fine use of limited words Good Luck! Blessed Be, Happy Samhain ~Peace~Gar

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