Crimson skies
Black seas
She walks along these shores.
Red sand between her toes,
Shards of glass piercing her heels
Trapped by the memories of her own regrets,
Memories that won't fade away
Haunting her forever more.
Author notes
Prompt: Regret's shore
37 words
I was looking for a picture to go with the poem and this was the closest picture I could find.
Picture credit goes to: http://aegis-strife.deviantart.com/art/Alone-51810005
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A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #27 by Aussie Gypsy.
550 points, ended November 2, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Such vivid imagery here! You've captured regret in the most painful terms. This is haunting, to say the least. Well written.
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Ahhh....regrets regrets regrets...we all have them...another strong write ylova! Great work seriously, I think I should visit your page after every one week, that way I get to read lots of pieces together, makes my day!
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did you peer into my mind for your write? its exactly what i think at times.i absolutely love this part:
Trapped by the memories of her own regrets,
Memories that won't fade away
Haunting her forever more.
oh yes, its my own mind! Great, and i do mean great pen!
becca
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There was a whole story that played out in my head as i read this. Your words are so beautiful. I love all the depth and emotion.
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This is absolutely brilliant, Oh God, I wouldnt even think of writing like this...red sand, wow, lovely! and then I realise why? wow girl! one more thing, I like the flow of this, totally cool, your rhyme wasnt intentional, but it sounds so fit!
Deep, sad, and I love it, I love the red between her toes, no I am not sadistic, but I love the art you created here!
Love and light,
lencio
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A most tender yet melancholic penning dear which speaks volumes.
mj.
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Sad.. love...pain and so very vivid.
I know this one.
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wowza me lady dis one is fab
painful dark
brilliant luved it
gd luck 2 ya
cheers
abe
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lovely! may nafique (i know i didnt spell that right-but hey french isnt one of the few languages i can speak.) its supposed to mean fabulous. fan-fricken-tastic babe
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This is a hard one to read, we all have our regret's to be sure. You captured it so well. Best to you in the contest
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Truly an emotional write. such is the thing of regrets.
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Strong emotions, deep and dark. Beautiful imagery, and an almost perfect flow made this poem the art that it is. Keep it up! And good luck in the contest!
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