Shadowed days, endless nights
The sound of my flowing tears
is all I am able to hear
My mind wanders off into the night,
Flashbacks of you,
still permit the stars to come crashing.
They shatter...
piercing my dispirited soul.
Author notes
Prompt: Stars still fall
40 words
Picture Credit: http://amuletz.deviantart.com/art/ode-to-the-stars-95840305
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A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #26 by AutumnGypsy.
550 points, ended November 2, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I think I may be visiting the painfully dark era of your writing again. Most people can relate to this at some point in time during their lives. The heart can be a fragile thing.
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Sad very sad indeed,
nice write none the least
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Oh I love the use of the word "dispirited" to describe the soul. Wow! If they ran a real contest and just gave you prompts like this I am sure you would steal all the limelight away by winning! you are so good at these, isnt it? Have you done any special training in literature or something, not necessarily, but your vocab and imagery is absolutely stunning! Just wondering!
Love and light,
Lencio
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This was so dark. I loved your take on the prompt! Ylova, I want to see some more love poetry, I know you do dark so well, but like I love your romantic poetry too! Write some of that soon too okay?
Good luck in the contest! Great write!
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awww. well done honey bunch, lovely use of vocab and beautifully strung together xx
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This is one of the saddest prompts I have posted and people have really taken it to heart. So sad to have love crash down around you in this way. Best to you in the contest
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Wow.. So deep and yet simple at the same time. Your new style of penning poetry is definitely beautiful. Amazing! Good luck in the contest!
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