Sipping wisdom from voice-less lips
emotions climb upon ladder of hope,
fire burns through hands where
finger tips bleed as light slips away,
~another beautiful soul
burns out on the ground.
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #26 by Aussie Gypsy.
550 points, ended November 2, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on the silver!
Wow, you certainly penned some brilliance here! This is stunning! Those last two lines really wrap this up well, deeply intense. Congrats on the silver
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Another spark extinguished, drifting slowly to the ground to merge with nothingness. Falling away from the hope of light. Penned so very well and highly deserving of the Silver, Congratulations!
Love,
Sun and stars shine no brighter than you!
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I like the gentle sadness within this piece, it fits the prompt very well.
Good write.
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Stars burn and crash all the times but just like the figurative stars no one notices that although they were a tiny speck, they were someones speck. You wrote this so beautifully. Best to you in the contest
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Oh my. Those last two lines were really something
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a lovely write . . liked "Sipping wisdom" and "emotions climb upon ladder of hope" . . good luck in the contest !!
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Such metaphor in this that is powerful and sad! Wonderful write
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great poem
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