The velvety stars, shining upon me,
Now dwindling, dimming with perplexity.
My eyes pry and spy on the silent seas
Embraced with emerald stars from the light
Emanating desperately from my edgy eyes.
Like a sleep-walking frigid figure,
I stomp steadily along the bowl coated with blue,
Arms stretched stupendously like a bird’s wings
Laying feebly along the sour sand with woes,
Gracefulness, innocence,
Butchered by the prowling, smug night.
Eyes looking upon the hazy host-less path,
Treacherous trees standing without any sound,
Snubbing my now helpless hopeless heart
And soul from love disowned,
Bequeathing an only oracle voice rumbling,
Hypnotizing the half renounced ears.
And the relentless words loll liberally,
Rub off my fear-full and shame-full shell,
Lean readily in the void that reigns inside me
And sink once the process is fruitfully fulfilled.
Now the trees recover as they witness the feat
Shivers intensely pat the sea surface
And the hourglass sadly runs out of business
As on that solemn night,
The soul soared freely for the first time…
Author notes
qwerty
A contest entry
- Finish Strong by TabbyCat.
700 points, ended November 20, 2008, 58 entries
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Wow,
Very, very good write.
thank you for entering.
Good luck darling!
I liked this
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The title here fits so neatly into your poem, can i just say thank-you for reading the rules as well!
This really made me feel, i'd happily read more of your work when this competition closes and you have made me come across difficult choices now.
Lovely write well done!
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Great metaphors. Love it.
Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck to you.
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you have painted a beautiful imagine with in my mind!
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For such a young poet you are truly talented, wonderful write, the description, the words all put a magical kind of touch to your poem. Good luck in my contest, and sorry I'm taking so long to judge it.
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Full of rich imagery and dark emotion. I particularly enjoyed the way you used alliteration throughout this piece. It was skillfully done.
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Excellent write. Thank you for entering it in my contest.
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this is truely amazing. your imagery is outstanding, as well as your metaphors. i really enjoyed this.
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