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Still There?

I hate you for making me
reduce all my passion
to metaphors and self(ish)-expression,
for denying me happiness
and a chance at redemption;

for taking my offering
and casting it down,
I hate you-
for giving me hope
and letting it fade,
I hate you;

for granting me peace
from the torrent inside
and delivering me
from an undesirable fate,
for letting me glimpse
and just barely grasp
a life of fulfillment
in every way,

and snatching it back.

I love you.

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Yes, I know how cliche the last line is. But it fits, so whatever.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Clichés are only so because ,ost of the time they are true. Yet oversaid.

    So if it fits, cliché or not, it shouldn't make a difference. Sometimes that's what people want!
    I mean, who doesn't love a happy ending!

    Anyway, I really liked this...I hate you I love you.
    Conflicting opinion.. love it.