There are two kinds of sons of a motherland.
One of them always work for self glory, praise
and generate wealth, legacy for their future
generations to enjoy without doing anything.
This breed knows how to fool the nation and shows
all with all crafty means how big a patriot it is.
This keeps subject in dark and also makes them
corrupt, as itself is, by the policy of appeasement.
People of this type keep themselves alive in the names of
monuments, institutions, roads, air ports etc.
sometimes even before they die.
Another noble variety is there who never bothers for its
day to day meals even, making treasure for children
and grand children, who are yet to be born, does not arise.
Its whole soul is devoted to people, sick, helpless
and every moment of them is spent for alleviating this distress.
It thinks making monument in its name is limiting its soul
in finite object, which in itself is slavery, and
an obstacle to realize the infinite God.
History will keep the immortal to let the past bury its dead.
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A contest entry
- LET THE PAST BURY ITS DEAD by Purush.
550 points, ended November 3, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options for the masses! by blackchapter.
550 points, ended November 18, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - silver IV by Salty Hibiscus.
550 points, ended October 11, 72 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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It's a lot of wisdom in the piece.
I like the title. It corresponds to content of the poem very well. I liked the ending of it:
"History will keep the immortal to let the past bury its dead"
Great poem!
Thank you for the entry, good luck!
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I warned you in the contest that I'm a bit of a pedant, so I'm going to get the bad bit out of the way: Line two : "works" instead of "work" and Line Ten: "Air port" is actually one word.
Sorry about that! Sometimes I hate myself, but things like that niggle at me!
Now, onto the poem.
I like this a lot. The quote itself is very interesting, do you know who said it?
It's a particularly thought-provoking write and it has a good flow, using good word choice and good form. There's a rhythm to it, which works.
Thanks for entering my contest.
Sarah -
... wow! At first I thought this poem was not quite right for the topic you chose. But after thinking through the contents, it fit's amazingly well, without being literal. There are a few areas where I think you've left out your "a's" or "the's" though e.g. "This breed knows how to fool _nation and show..."
Overall i'm very impressed, it rings true what you say... and the last line is brilliant!!!
Good luck for the contest.
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"Another noble variety is there who never bothers for its
day to day meals even, making treasure for children
and grand children, who are yet to be born, does not arise."
an excellent thought to be appreciated by one and all in this or any other context
All the best in my contes
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