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Forgotten

Dawn blushes from the  kiss of night,
and sheds her pink and golden gown
as frowning moon casts her eyes
on such  display of brazen gold.

Then Aurora melts into the sun
now stretched upon horizon's bed,

forgetting that brief kiss of dark,

and the night retreats in mourning shrouds.

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    November 1, 2008
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    Lovely rhythm in this beauty. No rhyme needed to make this delight sing.

    LOVED 'forgetting that brief kiss of dark'

    Enough to make me blush with the sheer beauty of the thought. I do like the reference as well to mourning shrouds. It depicts loss of light, of day, of something wonderful as is opposite to morning. Very clever.

    So much emotion expressed in the last brief love affair of day, lain prone upon horizon before she slips into the night.

    Thank you for this gem. ~Pamela

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 31, 2008

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    "now streached upon horizon's bed"

    Just a teeny typo, should be "stretched." No worries, plenty of time to update. I will be back. ~Pamela


  • melphleg gold member
    October 31, 2008

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    wow

    Beautiful piece my friend. You create such feelings in this. You have wonderful imagery. Once again I'm very impressed.


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 31, 2008
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    OH HOW BEAUTIFUL!!!!!

    I can see the moon setting on one horizon and the first morning light on the other.'s


  • suseann
    October 31, 2008

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    Adore the personafication of a morning's sunrise. If you listen closely to your verse,one can hear morning's demure Miss yawn and streach in vibrant hues.


  • Wandika gold member
    October 31, 2008

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    Hello Stranger

    Been a while since you have been here. On vacation? Hope all is well.
    Interesting poem. Excellent entry for this contest of Pam's.

    Jim

  • Bad Bill
    October 31, 2008
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    This is very nicely handled, with a "classical" feel to it. Very enjoyable piece of poetry.

    Bill


  • raspberry Greeters member
    October 31, 2008

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    I might not have read this poem.. but for the first two lines which went along in the display.. Beautiful..

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